#30/100
Since I’m too tired to even think today, my today’s post is my first and only attempt at poetry. This poem was written by me about 4 years back after having my heart crushed into a million pieces (I can be dramatic too!). I can laugh about it now but those were some trying times. I must have written this poem with tears in my eyes. Writing this poem did help ease the pain a little bit. I’ve never got around to write another poem after this one.
Her mind goes into overdrive,
To control the heart that wanders astray,
The world that she has in her dreams is too beautiful to leave,
Back to reality, every thought, word and silence is painful,
A moment of happiness turns into lifetime of grief,
She wonders what she could have done better,
To earn this unattainable dream.
Her dreams are too sweet to let go, but mind rigid,
Can she only have this wish? Her heart pleaded,
Time to shake herself awake from this difficult illusion,
There are much better things to look forward to, screamed her mind,
By leaving the best? asked her heart.
SUPER MODE 
Consciousness talking with the inner self !
Beautifully potrayed deeper emotions and yet making sense even when there are tears. The way forward is always going to be that.
If one can learn to treat – good times and not so good times alike – things will start to become more bearable and enjoyable.
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Too much space between each line in poetry, doesn’t capture the flow of emotions. Probably look at paragraphing them or making it into stanzas.
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And it’s not just drama 😉
It’s the melodramatic version of the self what is contained within a chapter which doesn’t spillover into another chapter !
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Well times have gone by
And beautiful memories captured
In words and expressions
They can be revisited
And many more memories to be created by action, by willingness and sometimes without any control or plan or anything whatsoever – things just happen.
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Drop a stone
Sparkle a ripple
Trigger a wave
Let it enrage
Reach the shore
Meet the dare
With a glare 🙂
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Thank you so much for your detailed feedback, will change the layout of my poem. Please don’t tell me you just wrote an impromptu poem while typing a comment for this post. That’s some incredible writing skill you’ve just demonstrated!
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I have noticed often I end up writing something well in response to an already beautiful creative piece.
So yes, it was in response to the poem and it was on the fly. (Impromptu)
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You are truly blessed, keep up the great work.
I have nominated you for the Liebster award. Please check my latest post for details.
https://thesupermode.wordpress.com/2020/08/24/liebster-award/
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Thank you for nominating but I don’t do awards 🙂
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No worries, I did my part by nominating you. Will keep this in mind for my next nomination!
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Absolutely loved the poem! Really touching.
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Thank you so much! I’m really not into poetry, this is my one and only attempt. Thanks for your kind words.
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I look forward to seeing more poetry on your blog because I really enjoyed this one!
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It’s might take another 4 years for me to write another one, haha! I’ll write another one whenever I’m ready for it.
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Yeah for sure you can only write poetry when you’re in the right mood!
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